Don Candido muses... : Fanfic poetry for ysabetwordsmith's 'Fiorenza' series

[the_vulture]

This is the second piece of fanfic poetry that I've written recently. It looks at the relationship between two characters from ysabetwordsmith's serial poetry series based around Fiorenza, the Italian Herbalist. It was primarily inspired by events occurring in the poem "Fiorenza and the Witch-Son," and explores what  possible thoughts Don Candido could have had immediately following the events thereof. 


Don Candido muses...

Here she comes into the village
wearing breeches again.
She cares not for anything proper
and scoffs at what I say.

Fiorenza, willful maiden,
you always dance too free.

With her basket of herbs and cures,
she tends to wounds and ills,
and, despite all her heathen ways,
virtue sits within her.  

Fiorenza, gentle healer,
you tend us all so well.

She sets about mending bodies,
as I see to our souls,
and all too much the same as I,
she wanders life alone.

Fiorenza, lonesome woman,
Does your heart know desire?

My advice to find a husband,  
is met with sharp rebuke.
I try to guide her from my path.
My heart is caged by vows.

Fiorenza, kindred spirit,
Can you sense how I yearn?

Comments

[minor-architect.livejournal.com]

My advice to find a husband,
is met with sharp rebuke.
I try to guide her from my path.
My heart is caged by vows.

This stanza is excellent! Sharp and insightful.

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I was exploring the idea that perhaps sometimes he may feel he may have sacrificed more than he wished to pursue his duties.

Thank you!

[ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com]

This is wonderful. I really appreciate getting to see it. I have linked your poem from my LJ and the "Serial Poetry" page.

Re: Thank you!

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the poetry that inspired it! :)

I'm really glad to finally get it finished and out. This one took a lot of thinking for me.

Re: Thank you!

[ysabetwordsmith.livejournal.com]

>>Thank you for the poetry that inspired it! :) <<

*bow, flourish* Happy to be of service.

>>I'm really glad to finally get it finished and out. This one took a lot of thinking for me.<<

Some poems do. I have at least one Fiorenza piece bumping around the back of my mind, and several for the Paladins series.

Re: Thank you!

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Excellent! Happy reading for all! :)

[aldersprig.livejournal.com]

oh, wow, this was well done. And yeah... I like that you gave voice to that undercurrent. :-)

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I picture the scene between Don Candido and Fiorenza in my mind, with him looking away after her remark. It plays with a lot of subtle emotional expression.

[aldersprig.livejournal.com]

*nods* You did really well with it!

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[marina-bonomi.livejournal.com]

Thank you for this. It fits well his voice in the series, and I love this glimpse into his thoughts.

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

You're welcome and thank you. :)

[rowyn]

I like the sympathetic portrayal. :)

[the-vulture.livejournal.com]

Thanks! The idea came from the same discussion that generated Fiorenza and the Witch-Son where a number of us were talking about why she's still single. Somewhere in the back of my mine came the thought "What if his initial hostility wasn't all about disapproval for all things heathen?"